The sun rises in the east and sets in the west
The clock ticks and tocks
Rivers rush forward and wheels keep turning
Yet somehow you feel lost in midst of the rhythm
If you keep up with the trends
you feel suffocated by the pace
The mechanical cookie cutter print sears your imperfections
Let go of your inhibitions
Let go of your stiffness
Let go of your facade
The sun rises in the east and sets in the west
But you dance under the sun and make your own rhythm
I really appreciated the line "The mechanical cookie cutter print sears your imperfections". It really brings out how it is important to forge your own path. Overall, great job on the poem; the message is clear, yet it is delivered sophisticatedly.
ReplyDeleteI really like how your poem focuses on not being like the people around you, but being yourself
ReplyDeleteI like how you portrayed the story of this poem as just to be yourself.
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