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Monday, September 19, 2016

Fine Line

The hardworking and persistent will come out on top
And the lazy and unmotivated will lay still on the bottom
Which one are you?
Which one does your mind tell you to be?


The persistent won’t quit
until perfection.
The unmotivated will quit
before given instruction.


There seems to be a fine line
between reaching your goals and not
But the line is that of a gaping hole
between the ones on the bottom and the top


The difference is not small
and neither are the consequences
Because those who chase
are the ones who succeed.
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5 comments:

  1. I liked the questions in the beginning because it makes the reader think more about the poem. I also thought the concluding paragraph was strong - "Because those who chase are the ones who succeed."

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  2. I love the use of rhetorical questions! It made me actually reflect back on my life and think about if I would come out on top or be buried at the bottom.

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  3. I really liked how you compared the unmotivated to the persistent and hardworking. In addition, you connected your rhetorical questions in the beginning with the end, saying that the ones who chase will succeed. I liked how you are trying to motivate the reader.

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  4. I really liked the message of your poem it really made me think. I also really liked how you used rhetorical questions because it made you connect to the reader and it made the reader think.

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  5. I really liked the message of your poem it really made me think. I also really liked how you used rhetorical questions because it made you connect to the reader and it made the reader think.

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