The distance between us
joint by an Arial plane
If only I could
see you say the words in that Facebook chat window
If only I could
pull you through the screen of our Skype call
If only I could
spend one more day with you
Where the Pacific would part
To make way for our bond
Where we would laugh into the afternoon
Sweating our worries away in the summer sun
Feeling as light as helium balloons
Up and down just like our lungs
I miss the old days
And I don’t know if they’ll ever come back
But I’m waiting
Over distanced texts
Over laggy video chats
I’ll be waiting
my friend
Waiting for another day
A day much brighter
than today
I felt the emotion in this and totally understand what you're feeling. I enjoyed the line "joint by an Arial plane". You help the reader understand the emotion in the poem
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy this poem, and I think a lot of others can relate to the emotions you are experiencing. I like the line "But I'm waiting over distanced texts over laggy video chats" because it helps paint an image in the reader's head.
ReplyDeleteI really like the topic of this poem; it touched my heart. One line that stood out to me was Sweating our worries away in the summer sun...
ReplyDeleteYour poem is definitely relatable and your poem was clear without being too simple. I liked the line, "sweating our worries away in the summer sun."
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the poem and could really feel the message that it was trying to portray. The use of repetition really helped create that sense of wishing and the line breaks helped show the sadness of not being able to be with your friend. Overall, the poem was amazing and I loved the line " Waiting for another day / A day much brighter / than today " .
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